I push out my last cigarette for the night. It’s late, I’m tired and I need to sleep. I hear the sound again, rustling, something unsettled, maybe unsettling. I look around but it’s dark. Too dark to see anything in detail, just shapes, shadows, unrecognizable forms along the ground and in the trees. I hear it again but can’t determine where the sound is coming from. I feel the hair stand up on the back of my neck and my heart pounding. Something’s not right. I turn and walk as quick as I can back to the garage, distancing myself from the possibility of whatever could be out there. A feeling comes over me as if at any moment something will appear, grabbing, attacking me from behind. Of course, none of that happens. Sounds in the dark are nothing more than that, just sounds. There is no evil lurking, no creature stalking you, it’s all imagination. An unjustified fear of nothing.
I press the button, turn around and watch the garage door closing. I feel time stop as all feeling rushes from my body. Standing there, in the garage entrance . . . is something. Long slender arms, legs and torso. Its nude, sickly pale skin quivering in waves, like something crawling beneath. A face void of definition, almost featureless. Eyes staring directly at me, it cocks its head slightly to the right. As the door closes further, it squats down, looking, watching. I don’t move. Can’t move. It leans forward, eyes fixed, down on its hands and knees, watching. Now lying prone, neck extended, side of its head flat against the pavement, eyes peering through the last inches of open space until the door is fully closed.
I’m ready to throw up as I run in to the house. This can’t be real. Jesus Christ, what was that thing? Over and over I tell myself it was just my imagination, my mind playing tricks on me. Lack of sleep, stress. But those eyes, the way it looked at me, I can’t get that out of my head.
I spend a couple hours repeatedly checking to make sure all the doors are locked. Looking out the windows. Nothing, just the dark. It’s gone, whatever it was. I just need sleep. Need to sleep.
Tossing and turning, I’m wide awake. I’ve never been this afraid. My mind won’t stop. I know it wasn’t real, can’t be real. I’m so cold. I squeeze my eyes closed, pulling the blanket up around my ears as I roll to my side.
A soft, high pitched voice shatters the silence.
“Why aren’t you sleeping?”
Oh my God it’s in here. I can’t breathe . . . can’t scream . . .
“I like to watch you sleep.”
I roll on to my back, swallow hard and open my eyes. There it is, at the side of my bed, standing over me.
“What? Wh-when have you wa-watched ma-me sleep?” The words choke but I’m somehow able to speak, although only a whisper.
Its slender arm bends, raises a hand from the floor and lays it on my chest.
“I’ve always watched you sleep.”
Nice short piece! Well penned!
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Thank you.
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Welcome!
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god!! this literally gave me chills and guess what?! im supposed to go to bed after checking my blog. god help me LOL
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Uh oh. Luckily, it’s up to you to decide whether this is some horrible evil that always watches him or perhaps it is a peaceful, angelic creature which lovingly watches over him.
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well, that is right but my mind likes to imagine everything as some vicious, demonic thing that is after me for some reason so despite the odds, thank you for that! 😀
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I understand.
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Stirred the emotions . Beautiful piece..👍
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Thank you for reading and commenting.
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hmm…. all i can think here is that this… creature is the thoughts that accompany me when i sleep. My worries and anxiety. Always watching over me. Making sure i don’t rest in peace.
Goddamn it!!!
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I can relate.
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happy that u do
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I had never heard of Slender Man so I Googled him. Man, that’s some creepy stuff.
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Yeah, it is.
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Yikes … you write suspense beautifully. I was captivated. I was also left wondering… : )
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Thank you, that means a lot!
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Thank you for commenting. Your opinion is very insightful. I just hope this doesn’t come across as too similar to the Slender Man, that was not my intention as I was not aware of him (it).
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No, not too similar at all – just a hint and then you made it your own.
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So creepy… but then also kind of like a buddy story… It just want to be friends… so lonely…
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Ha, ha, funny! Who knows, this may evolve in to a love story.
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haha… hopefully it doesn’t love him too hard…
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Maybe I’ll use this as my leap into erotic fiction.
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That’s one hell of a leap… a leap of faith maybe… but hey… look at 50 Shades of Gray… could call it 49 Shades of Weird… Who’s That at the End of My Bed?…
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This sent shivers down my spine! Crazy good writing as usual.👍👍
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Thank you very much, that means a lot!
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Great story.
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Thank you for reading and commenting!
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Kind of made me feel like my fear of the dark is justified! Great story.
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It may be . . . thank you for reading and commenting, I really appreciate it!
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As always creepy, you never fail to give me chills.
Back then when I used to get high I always had this feeling. I always had this fear of having someone, thst could be anywhere, my kitchen, closet, behind the door. I would frewuently check the lock. But this fear wasnt of some paranormal thing. It was of a real.person. It felt so insecure that I couldnt go in crowds, I was always watching my back walking alone.
I took a long break, and here I am back again, except for some one or two things, one of them.is your stories. This one was so creepy that it reminded me of how I once used to be.
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I also have some things in my past which I would never want to go back to.
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great writing ezpression… and yeah it was scary…. welll written…..
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Thank you for reading and commenting. It’s always nice to see new people stop by the blog!
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This is brilliant! I love suspense pieces, you write them really well😀
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Thank you, that means a lot.
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🙂
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Oh damn that is terrifying! Great job.
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Thank you, that is quite a compliment.
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Oh, this got me nice and creeped out. Very well done, it was worth the extra bit of uneasiness I’ll have tonight 🙈
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Thank you. I’ll take my making you uncomfortable as a compliment.
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Hah! It certainly is.
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I have that feeling all the time, and freak myself out imagining a figure standing where it shouldn’t, late at night, in my driveway, or under the trees. You nailed how it might feel there. The watching you sleep part – thanks for the extra!
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Thank you very much for reading and commenting, I really appreciate it.
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Hell, this is creepy! I was reading this with all my lights off I had to quickly turn it on ‘cause I got so scared while I read this story lol. Ugh, but i loved this. The effect of your piece to me is so intense, which only goes to show how amazing of a writer you are. Well done 👏☺️
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Wow, thank you so much. I really appreciate you taking the time to comment.
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Stories like these are my favorite! So it’s my pleasure to read such a masterpiece. ♥️
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That is truly creepy. Love it
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Thank you for reading.
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Very good! You kept me interested, then I read “I like to watch you sleep”, chill bumps grew. You are a great writer
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Thank you very much, that means a lot to me.
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🙂 my pleasure, looking forward to reading more!:)
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The feeling is mutual.
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Well done….your story pulled me in…but at the end, the strange being seemed …almost relatable…almost? I wanted to ask it questions lol
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Thank you. I agree, I only hope I would have the courage to ask the questions. Being afraid is a lot easier.
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It certainly is easier to be fearful…althoigh I’m more curious than scared about other dimensions.. .I’m a fan of sci-fi and fantasy and as I read your story i thought of stranger things…so props to you!
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Btw, I’m Wilde! I see that we are both part of morality park!
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Yeah, that’s how I found your blog. I’m looking forward to sharing this experience with all of you.
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Likewise!!!
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Are you posting on “Morality Park” today?
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Yeah, I posted a few hours ago.
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*shudders* awesomely creepy story!
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Thank you for reading. I’m checking out your blog right now. Great stuff so far!
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Oh gosh thank you! And likewise! Really glad I found you! 😊🌹
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Thank you for reading and commenting!
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Thanks for putting a link to this on ‘Go Dog Go Cafe’ – your writing hooked from the first line and on the last left me wanting to read more…
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Thank you very much, that means a lot to me.
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A bit terrifying. Definantly gave me chills. Great write!
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Thank you very much.
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You’re welcome
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Had to keep reading! The ending had me still holding my breath. Great job.
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Thank you, that means a lot to me.
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Very welcome
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Haunting and well done! Thank you for following BrewNSpew.
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I appreciate that, thanks.
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,👍👌
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It’s utterly benign, Watson. How can you say such a thing, Holmes? Elementary my dear Watson. Consider the evidence. The creature says, “I always watch you sleep” and we can but assume the protagonist is hale and hardy from the description. Therefore, the creature has been watching our protagonist sleep since he was born. One could go further and claim that the creature is a protector. Indeed Holmes, brilliant deduction.
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Brilliant indeed.
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This was wonderful! Very intense to read. The ending is perfect.
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Thank you again.
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😉
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Every inch, well writen.
I was seeing the crinch
who stole christmas
… but completely shaven.
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It would be a hack job for sure.
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All i’m thinking of is sexy lady monster. I absolutely loved this!
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Thanks for reading. And yeah, I’m pretty sure it’s hot.
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It’s like a sweet natured slender man! 😀 love it ^ ^
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Scary, with atmosphere! Loved it!
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Thank you for reading!
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Terrifying. Childhood nightmares literally coming to life in front of me!
I even like you when you’re dark and clearly disturbed lol 🖤
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Creepy as hell but intriguing nonetheless. Great work!
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Thank you.
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Thank you for the nightmare fuel.
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You’re more than welcome!
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This was awesome! I would love a part two! Spooky!
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Thanks. I was actually thinking about rewriting this one, making it longer.
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Kept me on the edge of my seat! Loved it!
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Thank you very much!
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Welcome
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This was EEEKKK! I like eeekkk.🎃
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Thanks. Me too.
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(Goosebumps) This spooked me. And the suspense in the beginning and the middle…
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Thank you very much. I had forgotten about this. I never bothered to edit it, it’s pretty rough.
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Hmm, Wonder what it will be like post-polishing if it’s this good now.
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I don’t know. These short pieces sometimes evolve into something longer. I definitely think there’s more to be said with this story. Thank you for reminding me about it.
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Your description is so real, it had my heart pounding!
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Thank you, Dawn.
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Chilling!
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Thanks for reading.
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