The door opens.
“Oh my god, the smell is horrible.”
“I told you, I didn’t know what to do with it.”
“Christ, how long ago did you kill him?”
“Four days.”
“And what? You’re just gonna let him sit there and stink the place up?”
“OK smart guy, you tell me, what the hell do you do with a dead body?”
“Shit I don’t know, I’ve never killed anybody. He can’t stay here though, that much I know.”
“You’re telling me. The whole thing has my cat really freaked out. He won’t come out of the bedroom and he’s licking all the hair off his belly.”
“What is that on the chair? Looks like shit!”
“It is shit. Apparently that happens when you die, you shit yourself.”
“Oh I don’t think so. I think he did that on purpose. One last fuck you on his way out. Why didn’t you shoot him?”
“I don’t have a gun. Besides, it felt so much better strangling him with that wire. He had time to think about what was happening.”
“You damn near cut his head off.”
“Well, I’ve been known to be overly passionate at times. You know that. So are you going to help me or what?”
“Look, you’re my sister and I love you. I’d do anything for you but right now, I’m fucking hungry.”
“I’ll make you something.”
“Are you kidding me? I can’t eat in here. It’s taking all my will power not to throw up from the stink. Seriously, it’s gross. Get your coat, we’re going out.”
“OK, no pizza though, I’m sick of pizza.”
“How about the deli down on 4th?”
“Ooohh yeah, soup in a bread bowl. Let’s go!”
He swings his arm around his sister’s shoulder and pulls her in tight. Grinning, he whispers softly in her ear.
“You’re buying.”
Oh wow, I’ll need to share this with a friend. I like it so much. To me it had everything. Drama, suspense, comedy and love.
You are so talented.
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Thank you my friend, I greatly appreciate that.
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Your’re welcome.
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I love the end! Acting so normally on such a horrific crime scene! I suppose that’s the whole no remorse factor! :O ❤
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Thank you very much for reading, I greatly appreciate it.
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Who did she kill? That question is driving me mad! Was it some random pizza delivery guy? An abusive lover? Her step father?
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That is a very good question and one I cannot answer. I will say it was no random person. And while I don’t condone violence, this guy had it coming.
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They are awfully casual for this situation. 😀 Good plot. I like it a lot. 😀
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Thank you very much my friend.
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Such a different plot ! 🤔
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Thank you for reading!
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I would hope my brother and I would react the same in this situation
😋
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Well let me know how it works out if you find yourself in a similar situation!
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Will do
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Suspense kills…If possible do continue with a second part as it’ll be lovely to know who was killed…Great suspense…U r flawlessly amazing..
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Thank you so much for the kind words. Maybe I will try continuing this. It could move in with them at the deli, eating and talking about what happened and trying to figure out what to do with the body. Thank you for the suggestion.
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My pleasure.. I agree it could be fun..
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Excellent stuff. I like the normality that exists in such abnormal circumstances. Just goes to show how quickly we can adjust ourselves to different situations.
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Thank you Chris, I appreciate you reading.
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You’re welcome.
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Ha, love this, Stories! I like that you took this in such a matter of fact direction, just another day in the life of a brother and sister. I hope you’re enjoying your Friday! ~ Mia
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Thank you very much, I appreciate that. Hope you are having a good day as well.
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You’re welcome, and thank you!
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What did I just read??! I don’t know, but it still painted a scene in my mind with it’s well-constructed dialogue.
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Thank you. It was meant to be humorous/for fun. Yup, that is my idea of humor.
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It was. You pulled it off marvelously.
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Thank you, your continued support means a lot to me.
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That was awesome man!
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Thank you, I really appreciate that.
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I love this kind of darkly sharp humor! Terrific!
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Thank you so much! Not many find my attempts at humor to be humorous.
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I think you are brilliant!
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Thank you again.
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“Season to taste”,a suggestion to take care of the problem 😉
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Good idea. Maybe they could feed the identifiable parts to the cat!
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Are they twins? 😀 this is great!
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I’m not sure, I’ll have to think about that. Thanks for reading.
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That is brotherly love
… Tarantino style.
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Ha, ha, thank you!
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For a minute there i had to remember this is not a book. Its really twisted lol..But i like it 🙂
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Thank you.
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Superb ❤️
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Thank you.
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the ending made me smile. loved it!
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Thank you so much, I appreciate that!
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Sorry to say, but this story is entirely disturbing. But since it’s filled with so much intrigue, I enjoyed reading it. I am a big fan of thrillers, mysteries ans suspense. I love that the brother is protecting his sister, as is should be, but I have so many questions. Why did she kill this man?, Who was he?, What transpired before this unfortunate turn of events? Will she get away with murder?. I want a sequel to this story. In fact I want a whole book on this.
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Thank you for reading and providing feedback. You are not the only one to mention they would like more to the story. Perhaps I will try to make this in to something more.
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Nothing like sibling love.
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It’s a beautiful thing.
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Really end was good… well at written
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Thank you very much, I appreciate that.
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haha awesome one 🙈😂👍👍👍
One last fuck you on his way out – brilliant line!
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Thanks. Yeah, turns out he was a real prick.
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lol, very creative, well-done 😎👍
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What a great message.
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Thanks for reading.
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Well written!
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Thank you for reading!
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Aw, man! I love this!
Brilliant work!
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Thank you for that, I appreciate you taking the time to read my work.
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Knew someone that got wrapped up in a situation like that. Brother and Sister love.
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Thanks for reading.
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😅😅 only a brother and sister can do this. Great !
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Thank you very much for reading!
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My pleasure 🙃🍁
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I am speechless !
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Thank you!
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Loved this.
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Thank you very much for reading.
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Pleasure. 💕
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Sounds like this guy was already dead before she killed him 😳. Oh well, pass the grated cheese 😂
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Ha! Thanks for reading.
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It seems to me you read many my work. I like this piece have you script written before? haha for you to post like on so many my work you didn’t leave a post so out of free time I read 3 of yours.
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No, I’ve never written a script before. Thank you for stopping by and reading.
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So your a writer and publisher? Do you write often? I find myself unimpressed with today’s electronics. I cant seem to shake its weakness. If you have a touch screen they freeze among other things and regular PCs take too long to load. Lmbo but that its made by humans nothings perfect. I appreciate the likes. Looks like your my only audience so far of course.
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Yeah, I write a little everyday. And I definitely understand frustration with electronics. Take care.
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I notice you have quite the fan base. How do I get more viewers? I also written a few books available on Amazon. I hadn’t done paperback version yet. For I notice one I wanted people to appreciate my work digitally first. Before committing to solid copies. Would hate to waste trees. Plus my stories are quite different than average. I string them in for mystery, suspense, danger than a slow but get to the point death. In other words my books are short stories that won’t break the daily routine. But leave a hunger for another. I want to start a trend of mini story telling. I feel some kids books got away from but too many adult books get too word stingy that it loses the story altogether. My plan is to keep it simple with a twist. Never forget the sudden twist. It keeps the audience completely on their toes. I also think I’m a bit funny but not sure how that plays. I have grammerly but it correction was a lot of time unnecessary or overbearing to say the least. A lot of my characters were invented merely off experience with a twist of fantasy so their language was not that of a language professor which grammerly didn’t like, that or their names
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Dude,no lie, my bestie pulled a prank on me one day, telling me she’s accidentally killed one of her patients by pushing them really hard cause quite frankly these people aren’t what they seem and treat her like shit. She started crying over the phone and I believed her so I told her to wait where she was and not to touch anything. She was 30 miles away but I dropped my food and got in the car when she suddenly laughed and said “damn, I was just kidding. You really would have helped me?…”
Point being, I get this. Haha great story, River. I needed me some short stories tonight.
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Oh, man, that’s funny. If I ever need help covering up a murder, I know who to contact.
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Haha yup, I got you! lol
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Getting rid of an abusive boyfriend and feasting on pizza afterwards, sounds cool! But they should cement dead body within the walls of their house…
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That’s a good idea!
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😊😁
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I had a brother like this once upon a time;-) To brothers~🍷
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To brothers.
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