Inspiration strikes like a match
In an afternoon monsoon microburst
Of clichés, tired and trite
The obligatory opening and closing
Threadbare and uninspired
A triple-dose of banal, twice-told
Allegories, tedious, tiresome
So much effort for the stale and pedestrian
How much time did you spend
Polishing that dime-store bauble of yours
You so pretentiously loft
Above everyday heads and ardent eyes
To declare, once again
The prowess of your prose
As eager critics lie in wait, lingering
To gnaw at pages, with condemning teeth
Tongues poised, ready to expose
Each flaw, every misstep
With stinging, acidic venom
Dripping from brooding lips and dull blade
A literary castration
Sends you cowering back, waiting
For one more day, a moment
Of inspiration, that strikes
Like a match, words burning down
From fingers to page
In one more attempt to offer
This world, something of substance
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Nice alliteration in that one… Added to the power of the poem.
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Thank you!
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Heavy, but deep.
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Thanks.
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Whoa there. Leave some fine verses for the rest of us. Way to go River. Loved this one. It sums up the whole shebang about creativity and the writer’s block. (FYI. I use my writer’s blocks to build a castle) 😀
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Thanks, I appreciate that.
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Beautifully bitter.
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Thank you very much.
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A literary castration?
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More in the ‘ to deprive of vitality, strength, or effectiveness’ than the literal sense.
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Proud of you for bending literary senses. 😅
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No criticism from me. Just good vibes for your eloquent words.
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Thank you!
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🌼 “Truer words…….” Well done!
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Thank you!
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Yep, that about sums it up. Great work.
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Thank you, Dawn.
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this was really good.
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Thank you so much for reading.
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There was no need to kick me in the balls.
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We all need it once in a while.
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Writing really seems to be an act of faith. Faith in what seems to be a mysterious question. Your words say to me that writing faith has to do with one’s voice that appears on the page, as if on its own. Well done!
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What you say makes sense. Thank you for reading.
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Wow, good piece to reflect on!!
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Thank you!
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Hi River. the way I understand your beautiful poem is that with one striking of inspiration you break free from the chains of criticism and judgment,
As always a big fan.
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Thank you. Yes, I like your interpretation.
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I love this. I do wish you’d leave some good stuff for the rest of us to pen as another person said. I was thinking that same sentiment.
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Thanks, Tara.
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I can hear this one being performed aloud ; it has a great rhythm, alliteration and internal rhyme. Really enjoyed.
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Thank you very much!
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My thoughts too. I loved reading this
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Thank you.
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Yes, beautiful! Criticism can sting, but that means people are hearing you! What are we all so afraid of?
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Good Question.
Thank you for reading!
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Exactly!
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To be honest I had to read it twice but it was worth it. Kudos.😊
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Thank you!
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Seems to encompass the roller coaster ride of creativity! Well done, River.
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Thank you, Angela.
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Wow – excellent, strong and powerful stuff. Fantastic, well-crafted poem that all writers will identify with. I love the idea of acid venom ‘dripping from brooding lips’ and ‘a literary castration’. I’m sure that’s how most of us would feel after a lashing from the critics. You are very talented. More please…
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I appreciate that, thank you, Alli.
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This definitely has substance. 😉 I love ”words burning down from fingers to page.”
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Thank you very much!
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This is excellent. An eloquent portrayal of the writing highs and lows. And I agree with E R Kendrich about the rhythm and rhyme. Bravo, River!
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Thank you very much, Meg.
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Always a pleasure!
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Wow… The most powerful and real poetry I have read in ages.
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Thank you very much for the kind words.
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” a literary castration sends you cowering back” so potent…… like a story in between ‘the stories in between’.
Fantastic!
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Thank you very much!
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Beautiful. This really resonated with me.
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I appreciate that, thank you!
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You out did yourself River !! Great work with words that actually got me thinking about all the work that goes into creating our posts for others to read and appreciate hopefully. I liked this poem !
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Thank you very much, James.
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You are welcome River. I was happy reading your post !!
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My creative writing workshops resumed today after a three month break and I can totally relate to what you are saying. Great writing!
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Thank you. Good luck with your writing, I’ve never been involved in any type of workshop. I bet it’s interesting, to say the least.
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It is because there are some very good writers out there and you’re exposed to all different styles. The guy that runs it is very knowledgeable and to the point in making you see what could be improved and why. Feedback from other participants is sometimes useful too.
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That does sound like it could be beneficial.
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Wonderful. These lines are my personal favorite, “To gnaw at pages, with condemning teeth.”
Keep it up. You are inspiring.
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Thank you, Ali.
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Damn! 👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻
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Thanks, Rita.
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It’s fabulous, River. Absolutely ❤️
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Wowsa, River! Outstanding piece!
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Thank you!
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Quite welcome.
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The inspiration which has kindled again and again only to be doused by the harsh criticism. Well portrayed through tour words.
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Thank you very much for reading.
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My pleasure
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Perfection.
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Thank you!
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What a great poem dear.<3
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Thank you!
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My pleasure.<3
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Enjoyed your selection of words and literary thought.
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I appreciate that, thank you very much.
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Well penned! Great read!
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Thank you, Michael.
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Wow. Just a great reminder of those thoughts and feelings we struggle through as we mine the depths for the good stuff. Thanks, I needed this today.
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Thank you, I appreciate you reading and commenting.
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Evocative and defiant to life’s challenges…very nice. Cool photo.
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Thank you very much!
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That dime store bauble is worth more than we care to admit! Great painting, great writing.
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Very true, we better hold on to it. Thanks for reading.
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You really are quite an extraordinary poet River – this is quite wonderful :O) In fact I think that it’s so relateable I’d like to share it x
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Thank you very much for the kind words and the reblog.
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You’re so welcome 😊 x
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Good point.
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Thank you.
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You’re welcome.
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Flip! Incredible.
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Thank you very much for reading.
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That was a great poem!
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Thank you very much!
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Love this!
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Thank you!
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Reblogged this on The Reluctant Poet.
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Thank you for the reblog.
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Always happy to read and share great writing, My Friend!!
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hahaha exactly. exactly like that. You get it. sigh
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Thank you for reading!
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“How much time did you spend
Polishing that dime-store bauble of yours.”
I love these two lines. It is something I have done as well–get too focused on the portions of writing which are not necessary. To destroy the raw, integrity of your potential words by fretting over whether they are perfect or not. Filtering out the mud and blood of the work out of fear until all that’s left is a sterile room, void of its original beauty and core potential.
I am one of those writers that hide their pieces. I have the most challenging time showing them to the world and opening up, and for that reason, like so many others, I end up rarely publishing anything that has not been destroyed by too much white paste over the heart and soul of the words. My goal this year is to destroy that habit.
I appreciate this poem a lot. Thank you.
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Thank you very much for the comment. You are right, it’s very easy to beat the life out of something with over-editing. I fall in that trap myself at times.
I hid my writing for a long time. I just started sharing it a little over a year ago, and I’ve been writing since I was a kid. I hope you start to share more of your work, I would like to read it.
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Thank you for the encouragement. I am excited about being on WordPress–at least for the community. I think it is going to help with getting over those fears and building confidence in my voice. 🙂
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Phenomenal piece!
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Thank you!
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