I walk these streets
That we once shared
Through neon’s glow
Window shop curiosities
Remind me
What it is
I’m looking for
As others pass by
Rushing
To become the ghosts
They were meant to be
The beggars and thieves
With outstretched hands
But that wasn’t you
Or me
We were different then
Or so, I believed
I still walk these streets
Alone
The ghosts rush by
Going somewhere, nowhere
While I stand in between
What’s meant to be
Waiting for a glimpse
A touch
Of the thing
We used to be
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River, this is a gorgeous poem. It’s beauty hurts.
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Thank you so much!
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You are welcome 🙂 Your poem is so beautiful I want to frame it.
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That’s nice to hear. I’ve actually been sitting on this poem for quite some time because I felt it was pretty mediocre. I’m glad it resonated with you.
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It’s not mediocre, River. It’s excellent. Please know that.
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Thank you.
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😊
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I agree!
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very emotional poem, but beautifully penned
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Thank you.
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This might be a personal question but, do you ever doubt yourself? Do you ever write something that is good but not better, as you want to expect of yourself.
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I would say I constantly doubt myself. And everything I have ever written could be better, in my opinion.
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Are you kidding? Your work is incredible and I’m so happy to know that soemone as good as you doubts himself. Whew!
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That’s kind of you to say. Self-doubt seems to be a shared trait between most of the people I know who are trying to do something creative. I think it’s okay as long as you can acknowledge it and then move on, not letting it consume you.
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Another beauty. Almost makes me want to find romance again to experience that sweet pain that you describe…
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Snap out of it, man!
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😂
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Maybe travel to a different city?
I can feel the loneliness coming through this piece. Well done.
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Thank you very much!
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Another stunner, River, oozing a sense of loneliness and longing in the anonymity of chaotic crowds. I love the allusion to ghosts, I often think that of people rushing by that you’ll never see again, wondering who these shades are and where they’re dashing off to. Wonderful imagery, and a poignant portrait of a lost love.
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Thank you very much for the thoughtful comment!
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Perhaps we’re all beggers and thieves that do not, however, desire money, rather something else.
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Very insightful. That is exactly what I was getting at.
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Lovely and haunting. Your poetry is phenomenal. I always feel transported to the place you bring me with your beautiful imagery.
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Thank you for the kind comment.
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River, this is beautiful. It takes me into a space outside of the noise, a quiet space of reflection and loneliness.
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Thanks, Susan.
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Beautifully poignant River.
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Thank you!
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Always a pleasure to visit and read your words.
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Beautifully penned ❤
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Thank you.
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Okeeeey… where did I leave those razors, I can’t find them. Man, it’s like I watched some artistic black and white French movie about the tragedy. Very vivid and in a gothic way, beautiful. Loved it. 😀
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I appreciate that, thank you.
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Such beautiful nostalgia for younger, more confident years.
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Thank you!
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No problem!
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The grim realities of becoming an adult put in such a poignant, beautiful manner. Nice job!
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Thank you very much.
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River you out did yourself on this piece, it is absolutely breathtaking
You paint such vivid imagery. Love hurt, you made the memories dance and confirm. It was not a mistake.
Yonnie💜🌸
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Thank you for the kind words, Yonnie.
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You are quite welcome a pleasure as always!
Yonnie💜🌸
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Fabulous!
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Thanks, Rita.
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Wonderful!
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Thank you!
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Beautifully articulated… really haunting. ❤
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Thank you very much for reading!
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A melancholic experience this write. Isolated while completely surrounded.
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Thank you.
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The ghost of memories are amongst us. ☕😊
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Thank you for reading!
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You are welcome!
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Wonderfully written River!
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Thank you!
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You’re welcome!
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Simply wow and so powerful who understands what it reminds of
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Thank you!
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“Window shop curiosities/Remind me/What it is/I’m looking for”… takes me to my interest in observing people and how they interact as I judge their level of true love, lol. I could people watch all day. I felt the ending especially, as usual.
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I also enjoy people watching.
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Loved the melancholy of it. Nostalgically beautiful.
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Thank you, Bojana.
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This was amazing. I loved the nostalgic tone.
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Thank you very much.
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I really enjoyed this. Well done!
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Thank you!
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Great poem! 😀
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Thank you!
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This is breathtaking River, it really pulled at my heart strings – another superb piece 😊 xx
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Thank you!
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So many feels in this piece, River! Gorgeous!
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Thank you very much.
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❤
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Find the nut, let the rusted hand’s crack it. 🙂
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This is beautiful writing, River. You are very talented.
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Thank you very much.
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My pleasure!
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I’m looking for
As others pass by
Rushing
To become the ghosts……
I LIKE THIS, JUST TOLD MY THOUGHT IN THE MOMENT.
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Thank you very much!
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Very beautiful! ❤
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Thank you!
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Well said
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Thanks.
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😊
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Lovely
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Thank you!
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Exquisite.
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Thank you.
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You are very welcome x
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I love it! So beautiful, painful and deep!
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Thank you very much.
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The words sting and I guess that’s what poetry is supposed to do. Beautifully written!
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Thank you very much.
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