In this room, is one of four walls
Where there once contained
A great picture window
I would stare as the sun shone through
At the beauty beyond each pane
There was life on the other side
And a life on this side
One day a bird, unknowing, unseeing
Crashed into the window
I watched as it lay twitching
Wing bent, neck broken
The last moments as it clung to life
Given to me, to remember
In this I keep a vague memory
Of someone’s laughter
On the other side of the window
Looking in
Once so bright and clean
I couldn’t imagine being anywhere else
Until dark and screaming
There was nowhere else
The laughter and the screams would not cease
So, I boarded up the window, painted over
Ignoring the spilled things, littering the floor
Like so many dead flies
On a Wednesday afternoon
Where I sit, staring at the blank wall
As the hours give way
To the fading, cracked, peeling paint
This room elicits no response
As it’s quiet here, now, always
Deaf ears absorb each plea
I manage to whisper, forsaken prayers
Bludgeoned against my wall, lie broken
Atop the days I have lost, given
To this solitude, a sacrifice in hiding
From the beauty that mocks
On the other side of broken things
This Room

The closing adds so much beauty to the poem.Loved it,
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I second her!
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Thank you.
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Thank you so much!
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I like the theme… the duality… separated by something as thin as a pane of glass… violence, death and mockery on the one side and you on the other. Nice!
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Thanks, friend.
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Yes, beautifully written. I read through it unhesitantly. It flowed so well. Thank you. 💜🌼
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You’re welcome. Thank you for reading, Jen.
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Thank you for writing! 😊👍
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Very powerful and moving. I read it as not being able to cope with life and all its unpleasantness. Don’t let anything in to disturb your equanimity.
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Yeah, but then by cutting yourself off you create something much worse than what is on the other side. Thanks for reading.
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Circle of pain and beauty. Gorgeous.
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Thank you so much.
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My pleasure 🙂
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I guess we are all this bird, Wing bent, neck broken….
Beautifully penned, River.
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At times, yeah, I think so.
Thank you, Bojana.
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Poor birdy… that’s how quick life ends 😫
On the bright side – there’s always afterlife lol 😂
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Hell yeah, if you’re gonna go out that way, there better be something better waiting!
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Take a bow, Poet!
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Thank you very much for reading!
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fully deflated…this condition that follows loss
“the other side of broken things” — is where we find more broken things
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Very true, Mark. Thank you for reading.
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Wow!
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Thank you!
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You’ve excelled yourself with this one, River. There’s a film in here somewhere, with such strong imagery and a heart-breaking narrative – it’s really quite cinematic. As ever, your words are strikingly well grafted together. I love ‘forsaken prayers bludgeoned against my wall’ (who among us won’t identify with that?) and ‘the beauty that mocks on the other side of broken things’. You have a true gift. 🙂
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Thank you very, very much for the kind words, Alli.
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I do admire your ability to go back to the dark corners of your mind and find inspiration there to create such well-described images. It’s absolutely stunning to see them and in a way live in this gothic world. Great job, Commander Dixon. I expected nothing less from a talented man you are.
PS: I mentioned you here, so if you have the time to respond, I’d be on my marry.
https://dronstadblog.wordpress.com/2019/05/14/night-time-blabbering-305
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Thanks, friend. And yeah, I saw your post and was ignoring your question. You should know by now I expect nothing from you and you shouldn’t feel obligated in any way to do anything for me. Focus on what you need to do to get where you want to be and don’t waste a thought on owing me anything.
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Damn, why are you so nice to me?
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That’s not it. I just want to walk into a book store one day and find one of your works on the shelf, is all.
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Same here. And that could be an even longer wait. One day. One day. Thank you for being so understanding and supportive. I’m really honored to call you my friend. I just want you to know that.
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The feeling is mutual.
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This is amazing. It’s penetrating and visceral. Excellent work!
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Thanks, Meg, that means a lot to me.
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My pleasure!
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Beautiful poem, River, it perfectly captures how a place of refuge can so easily turn into a prison.
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Thanks, Josh.
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No problem!
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Wow, yet another beautiful piece. I enjoy the imagery a lot.
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You’re very kind, thank you.
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River your writing is excellent, this is a Brilliant Story! So much imagery to unfold.
I will once again attempt commenting on this wonderful creative piece.
The boarding of window keeps out the light. A sign of imprisonment of not wanting to face the other side. Trapped by the things we don’t want to face. The boards are like a bandage on an open wound that has been treated. Infection can set in, it can spread like a cancer affecting the whole body. Mental , Physical, Spiritual Challenges Existing.
Yonnie💜🌸
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Thank you, Yonnie. I agree with your interpretation.
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Oh, River! Your words spoke, thanks for agreeing with the interpretation. It is a Really great story.
Yonnie💜🌸
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The bird crash description was so well executed. Well done.
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Thank you very much.
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Your poem elicits a strong sense of nostalgia yet there is a calming assurance, perhaps due to the familiarity of this place. The bird who will not sing again and the isolation, a sadness. Oh, this is a beautiful poem River.
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Thank you very much.
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You’re welcome, I enjoyed.
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Deep…
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Thank you for reading.
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My pleasure!
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Makes me want to cry. Reminds me of something broken, lonely, hysterical, and fleeting. The hopeless waiting, the endless unknowing. The perpetual cycle of the heart healing and hurting itself..
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Thanks for reading.
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Bir kafesten bakanlar görürler..
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Thank you for reading.
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This is a masterpiece. I love it ❤️
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Thank you!
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Devastating.
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Thank you for reading!
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So surreal!
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Thank you for reading.
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Wonderful River, just wonderful :O) xx
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Thank you.
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Beautiful
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Thank you very much.
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Very nicely penned! ❤
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Thank you!
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Beautiful writing! You’re incredibly talented, and it’s a pleasure to see such a level of care in your work!
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Thank you, Rochelle, that’s very kind of you.
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This is writing in perfect form. I keep revisiting it, it’s that good.
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Thanks, Tara.
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Beautiful! 🌸
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Thank you.
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Wrenching and profound, and so beautifully written
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Thank you.
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So beautiful. 🌻
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Thank you.
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🌻🙏🏾
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Powerful and compelling piece. It flows beautifully letting the reader absorb and enjoy the meaning.
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Thank you very much for reading.
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My pleasure!
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It’s a beautiful piece of writing,it flows so well, great day ahead!
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Thank you very much.
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“Forsaken prayers”…maybe those are the prayers that didn’t rise beyond the ceilings. Death is dark and ugly, life is bright and beautiful. I like the way you expressed the contrasting realities.
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Thank you very much.
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