The dawn was brief
When I laid down
To greet
Your sacred offering
Masked by shadows
You watched
As I covered myself
With your fallen grace
To be born unto
These lies I cling to
Truth, stripped away
Not a single drop remains
To be claimed
As if we were owed anything
Beyond the recognition
Of time’s cruel waltz
A slow dance between fractures
Vision tainted with tincture
Of possibility
That one day, the dawn
Will last forever
The Dawn

Wow, what a fantastic piece. And the finale is majestic.
“Vision tainted with tincture
Of possibility
That one day, the dawn
Will last forever”
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Thank you so much.
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My pleasure 😇
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I get a little tired of telling you what a great poet you are.
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Thanks, Charlie.
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“that one day, the dawn Will last forever” your poetry never ceases to inspire….
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Thank you very much!
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Reblogged this on Let's Talk.
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Thank you for the reblog!
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My pleasure.
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You last line was definitely inspirational, but what is wrong with dusk? After all, it is something that dawn comes after.
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Or does dawn come before? Hmm . . .
Nothing wrong with dusk, I’m sure if I look, I’ve got at least one poem about the dusk.
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Damn. Good point…
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Fabulous poem, River. I love ‘time’s cruel waltz… a slow dance between fractures’. Achingly beautiful, with exquisite emotion radiating from every line. Wonderfully painful. ❤
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Thank you very much, Alli.
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My favorite lines were:
“You watched As I covered myself With your fallen grace” and
“A slow dance between fractures”
Fantastic writing, River. Truly moving.
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Thank you, Tara.
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Damn!!!! All I got, Brother. I’m running out of superlatives over here.
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Thanks, Rita.
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You are most welcome.
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Damn River, this is so good.
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Thanks, Bojana.
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Oh my! This poem is exquisite. Packed full of gems. Amazing
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Thank you for reading.
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Beautiful word choices! Always enjoy your poetry.
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Thank you!
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excruciatingly beautiful … puts my head in places i thought were buried, that’s art… thanks for sharing 🙂
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Thank you for reading!
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River, you play with words like a conductor plays with music – so elegant, so controlled and so effortlessly beautiful – another masterpiece :O) x
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Thank you so much!
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“With your fallen grace” — this is something…
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Thank you very much!
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Original!
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Thank you!
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the last two lines hold so much longing
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Thank you, Gina.
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“Time’s cruel walz” I like the sound of that. Well done.
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Thank you!
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You’re welcome 🙂
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You are so incredibly talented!
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And you are so incredibly nice!
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Your work is so inspiring and magnificent.
Loved this line,
“That one day, the dawn
Will last forever”💕
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Thank you, I really appreciate that!
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My pleasure!🙂
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beautiful words my friend.
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Thank you, Jerry.
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A beautifully composed piece, with a hopeful ending…I too am waiting for the “dawn that lasts forever”!
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Thank you so much, Ally.
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Always a pleasure, River. 🙂
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Enjoyed your wording “time’s cruel waltz.” Very true! Life is often a slow dance and then it speeds up in certain places.
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Thank you very much.
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Such a pleasure to read your poetry. This is gorgeous, River.
♥.
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I appreciate that, thank you!
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Wow! I can’t pick a favorite line or two because your poem is stunning in its entirety. Bravo!
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Thank you very much, Eugenia.
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