Was it a sequence
Of words
Drifting in and out
Like the last time
I tried to sleep
Through the
Drowning sands
With silica dreams
And dry-mouth
Failures
How high
Were the tides
That time
I slipped
On my way
Back up
To city streets
Polluting
The last thing
Which made
Any difference
In all this
Treading
Through the
Forgotten waters
Two by two
They come
With pages
Some blank
Some etched
With cryptic
Scrawling dreams
Left open
Only for interpretation
By words
Left Unspoken
Or screamed
Out loud
The last time
If ever
A sunset graced
Your horizon
The Poet part 1
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See. this is why I am not doing poems. I could never do it as good as you are. ๐
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Thanks for the compliment but that’s not true.
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You heard my voice singing in your sleep. I rescued you from the torrential waves and kissed your lips to respire your breathe. I held you in my arms, clutched to my chest. Your slow clumsy hands pawing and punching my my back and my neck. I cradled you against the waves of the water in the storms. And when the water was finally at peace I returned you back to the shores. I sang to while you slept. I sometimes wish you remembered, but… sea creatures are rarely pretty.
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Wow, I like that. Thank you.
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*hides behind hands* yeah? I’m not just.. annoying am I? thank you..?
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Nah, you’re not annoying.
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That’s really beautiful
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Effing gorgeous
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I appreciate your continued support.
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Of course. Love your stuff
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The feeling is mutual even though I rarely say so.
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True. You don’t say much to me, lol but I know you read me. I appreciate it
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Beautiful!
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Thank you.
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Outstanding! As usual.
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Thanks Rita!
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Just beautiful.
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Thank you!
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my pleasure!
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A string of beautifully intertwined words. A true poet and I always love the pics accompanying your poems. Do you take them yourself?
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Thank you very much. No, the pics are all public domain from Pixababy or Unsplash. I usually do some manipulating to them though. I like B&W.
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They complement your words perfectly โค
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Thanks!
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Beatitude
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Wonderful. It’s the drifting in and out that in the long run makes the tide grind rock to marble.
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Thank you, I appreciate the comment!
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Beautiful words๐
Thank u for sharing๐๐ผ
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And thank you for the kind words.
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Wow! So Beautiful! I love the desert and the water, the sinking feeling. The last line absolutely gutted me. I feel inspired to write some poetry for the first time in a while. Thank you!
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Thank you. That’s exciting, I look forward to reading what you come up with.
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Dazzling!
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Thanks for the reblog.
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Wow! You have so much talent! X
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Thank you for the kind words.
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Youโre so welcome, I find your writing very inspiring x
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So Beautiful!
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Thank you!
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Wow. Yeah, I really like this (and the first one). Really really good, as always.
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Thanks Tara.
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Do you have a daemon?
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I’m not sure. I suppose that is certainly a possibility.
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I really like this…deep..left me wanting more
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Thank you!
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I love the rythm and intensity of it. Well done!
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Thank you!
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Fantastic poem! I loved the “cryptic scrawling dreams”…it was all amazing!
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Thank you!
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You’re welcome!
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I really like your 2 part poem. I wanted a third, but I see the sunset is a sunset.
Perhaps an endless poem is what I am craving?
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Thank you. I can relate, I think perhaps I am also in search of an endless poem.
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Ah! A bravo moment! Brilliant piece.
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Thank you very much!
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My pleasure!
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Beautifully written, words flowing so clearly, so impactful to the heart ๐. Embracing from the start..
InHisCare ๐
Yonnie๐
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Thank you very much for the continued support.
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You are welcome, it is indeed a pleasure as always ๐
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Lots of great images!
My only suggestion is some of the lines are too short, creating a choppy FLOW. Try reading it out loud. In my view, two syllable lines are problematic in creating flow, especially if they are consecutive lines.
If you have a minute, read Carolyn’s first poem, Summer’s Wind. (Click LOOK INSIDE THE BOOK.) She creates beautiful flow that transports the reader with just the right line lengths:
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Kum ve rรผyadayฤฑm tanrฤฑm
Daฤฤฑldฤฑm
Son kez
Birisi
Bir ลeyi sรผslese…
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Thank you for reading.
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Dry mouth failures ๐
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Thanks
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Words left unspoken are the ones that haunt me the most. They are the loudest of all our silences.
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Absolutely. Thank you for reading!
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Well this is an absolutely brilliant piece and the best thing I’ve read in a long time.
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Thank you for the kind words, that means a lot to me.
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Brilliantly crafted as always! Thoroughly enjoyed this one! ๐ค
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Thank you!
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No problem! ๐๐ค
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Oh!
The imagery …
The imagination …
The mystical,
Magical touch!
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Thank you very much!
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altogether nearly perfect
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Thank you.
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The poem evoked a hazy feeling as I read it. As if I was reaching out and trying to grab those words, but they drifted away. Like a dream. Like a muse…
A great piece.
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Thank you so much!
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Hello River I have Nominated you for the Sunshine Blogger Award. I hope you will take part in this. Congratulations !
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Thank you, James. I appreciate you including me.
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You are welcome River. I enjoy your writing and your blog is interesting and good to read.
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wonderful as always… but tomorrow – surpriseeeee!! I’ll give my HOOOOONEEEESSST feedback on your ‘Waiting’ book :)) haha Hercule Poirot and Vampires are involved :)) just saying ๐๐๐ป๐ป
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Oh, man. I canโt wait!
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Aaaaaaa soon ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
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This is a masterpiece. Your expressions are flawless. Great job, talented poet!๐ธ
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Thatโs very kind of you to say, thank you.
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I can truly appreciate these words.
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Thank you, Fall.
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Wonderful!
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Thanks, Luisa.
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