There it is again
At the corner
Of my eye
Dangling, distracting
A tiny strand
Twitching, dancing
As if
From a marionette’s
Interpretive hand
Like a dream
Loosely defined
Across the hangman’s
Rented cowl
Look, the pacifists
Are there too
Cheering
Preaching their scripture
For the destruction
In the name of, necessity
For the preservation
Of the distracted masses
But who they are, likely
It is lost to me, again
This fruitless labor
Of love, in the name of
The last true reflection
Of integrity, wiped away
I smile, again
As the trapdoor opens
Beneath my feet
And there I am, dangling
At the corner
Of someone else’s eye
A fall from grace
To spare the one
Who stands looking
The last eight lines made this poem…. return to theme, powerful imagery…
I won’t say “very nice”, however, because the topic was particularly nasty. Instead, “Well done!”
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Thanks, friend.
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Brilliant!
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Thank you, Jen.
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My pleasure River 🙂💜
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Oh God, I am so familiar with this fall from grace.
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Yeah. Maybe grace is noting more than an illusion and the best thing that can happen to us is to fall. Just a thought.
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You know, the best thing that could’ve happened to me was that fall. It taught me about my humanity and what it means to have compassion.
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Those are very important things. I have also picked up a fair bit of humility along the way.
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Yes, my journey mirrors that as well.
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Also, I like the title of your poem. Kinda like a murder of crows, or a parliament of owls, or an unkindness of ravens. I just like it.
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Thanks. I’m not sure where that title came from, it just popped in my head when I went to save the file. It seemed to fit.
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fruitless labor
Of love
Loved this. Great ending.
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Thank you, Bojana.
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At the corner of someone else’s eye. 👍 I always love when I read lines I wish I’d written lol
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Thanks! I love when that happens too.
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I love this on so many levels, River. For a start, it would fit perfectly into a medieval text, so it’s a natural winner for me. And the imagery and metaphor – A ‘fall from grace’ for a hanging – amazing. I don’t know how you manage to cram so much story, emotion and evocation into your work, but you do it incredibly well. I was there, in the thick of it. Fantastic.
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Thank you so much, Alli.
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That beginning is kind of creepy though. Reminds me of when a spider dangles down e.e Ugh I gave myself the chills hahaha
But that ending and how you brought it back around was absolutely brilliant. Love this one!
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Thank you very much, Mercury.
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You’re the man to read, River.
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Thanks, Eric.
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Ah… very clever!
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Thanks, Kevin.
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So good, River.
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Thank you, Rita!
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Sometimes I feel like you can read my mind. So so familiar. Love it! 😉
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Thank you very much, M.
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You’re welcome 😉
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I really do like this poem. I think the final 3 lines are what do the trick. “A fall from grace, to spare the one, who stands looking”. Brilliant.
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Thanks, I appreciate the feedback. I actually had removed those lines and then decided to add them back in at the last minute.
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Ghad. The last part was… 🙊🙊🙊
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Ha, ha, thanks.
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Köşede bir karanlık var. Onun ışığı.
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Thank you for reading!
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Powerful.
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Thank you.
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As I read from start to end, I felt increasingly dangled from the thread of your thought and words. It was quite an experience, thank you!
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Thank you.
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Great style to this – each line wraps itself perfectly around the next, drawing the reader in. Well crafted.
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Thank you very much.
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You’re welcome.
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The development of the metaphor was masterful!
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Thank you so much!
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You are an amazing writer!
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Thank you so much for the kind words!
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Bravo River!
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Thank you!
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Sometimes I think they ‘knight’ just to bring one to one’s knees.
Sometimes I think praise is an instrument of control,
and sometimes I think there are those unique creations that are
truly deserving of all accolades…A Likelihood of Saints is one
such creation. Bravo!
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Thank you. Praise as an instrument of control . . . I like that. You gave me something to think about.
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“and there I am dangling at the corner of someone else’s eye”……this is brilliant, River!
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Thank you, Susan. I hope you are doing well.
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loved it
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Thank you!
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Wonderful ☃️☃️☃️
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Thanks, Ray!
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☀️🕺✌️
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One on the best piece I have read. Your writing is so powerful, lts like a learning the rhythm, style and the choice of words. Great work 🙏
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Thank you for the kind words, it means a lot to me.
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😊
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i love it so much that I can hear my soul scream while I was reading it.
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Thank you very much.
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