I can’t remember How many days it’s been Lost in these hours Through deep exhale The crisp autumn air Burns cold With each inhale There’s so much more I can’t remember But I do know How much I miss The fallen leaves Midnight bike rides The old church Where I would hide And smoke But hiding from what Was I really hiding If nobody is seeking They never noticed The rocks In my pocket Thrown At passing trains Even then My first impulse Was to lay down Across the tracks To catch a glimpse If only for a moment Of what waits On the other side of this It’s only a matter of time Till they come out, come out From wherever they are But I’ll be safe In these spaces between Where no one Can find me
From my poetry collection, Left Waiting, available at Amazon.
Beautiful…😉😊
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Thank you!
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Why does this sound like a melancholic French guy who adores the doom metal type of music? 😀
By the way, I love the motives. Splendid work, um… River Dixon? What?
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Thanks, that is quite the unique interpretation. Although I think he may be Swedish, not french.
River Dixon is my pen name.
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Good to know that. 😀 I was thinking of the same for myself. 😀 No luck though. 😦
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I had a difficult time coming up with one.
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I know the trouble. Usually it’s taken, or there is some person with that name, far more popular that I’d be and the competition is hard.
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Yeah, I had one I really liked but it was taken.
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This is beautiful. Love it!
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Thank you very much.
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a pleasure!
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Lots of great images, the fundamental building block of all great poetry.
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Thank you sir.
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This is wonderful! I love it so much! Made me take a breath!
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Thank you!
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This is so Gorgeous!!! You don’t just see life, you climb inside of it and feel it. As ever, you inspire me!!!
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Thank you Susan, I hope you are doing well.
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I remembered the sage advice of our friend Rita, and danced like a mad woman around my house yesterday…..and I felt better. Sometimes it lasts a day, sometimes a year……I have learned to just roll with it. I am super thankful for writers like you who inspire me and lift me up and get me writing again!!!
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She knows. Best to just do whatever she says.
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Reminders of life.
And beautifully expressed.
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Thanks.
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And I enjoy the changing avatars 🙂
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Thanks, I’m not very good with photos so I’m just trying to find one where I don’t look like a total goon.
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Out of the three I’ve seen I’d pick one two or three. Those are my favorite goonless ones 🤗
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Thank you.
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Wonderful!
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Thank you!
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Lovely.
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Thank you.
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Good writing!
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Thank you very much!
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Poignant! Very clever and wonderfully written. Two parts stood out to me the most:
“Was I really hiding
If nobody is seeking
They never noticed”
And
“But I’ll be safe
in these spaces between
where no one
can find me.”
Masterful. ~Kelsey 😊
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Thank you Kelsey, I really appreciate that!
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My new favorite of yours. ‘Till they come out, come out from wherever they are’ – brilliant 👏🏻👏🏻
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Thanks Rita!
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I love the imagery this piece paints. Your pen name has a nice ring to it… I am a fan of rivers, too. Especially those that run through forests.
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Thank you. The town I grew up in had a large river running right through the middle of it so that river was a big part of my childhood. Everything centered around it.
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Sounds so blissful. You’re welcome.
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A relatable theme, that of hiding out. I liked this.
These are the lines that resonated most with me,
“It’s only a matter of time
Till they come out, come out
From wherever they are
But I’ll be safe
In these spaces between.”
I like the reference to the childhood game of hide-n-seek and being safe between the spaces.
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Thank you very much for reading and commenting!
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Exceptional work! Strong writing!
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Thank you!
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Absolutely perfect, as I expect nothing less from you. I can relate to so much of this (in my own way), it’s a bit ridiculous really but that just makes it all the better. I’d like to go on and on, but I think I’ll just leave it at: excellent and I really love this.
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Thank you.
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Oh geez dude. You totally forgot to look for me and you want me to find you? Did you look in your pocket? I was hiding in there the whole time. I’m the wocket socket sprocket. I shifted from tree to stone in order to hide from the fires and men who just wanted everything of me to burn.
Get off the tracks and DISSENT DISSENT DISSENT. Throw my rocks at their faces, I will break upon their cliffs like the water wall and falls. The jewels of the crown are inside, you just have to crack open the right geode (if it is treasure you wish to find?)
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Very relatable.
River Dixon is a new addition, isn’t it? It reminds me of two people I once admired a lot.
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Yeah, I finally decided on a pen name. I’m curious as to who the two people are.
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One is an ex whose favourite actor was River Phoenix. The other is my best friend who passed away and who I mentioned on my blog a couple of times before.
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This is beautifully written wrapped in transparency of apparent hiding when no one is even looking. Great flow. Graphic & title excellent.
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Thank you!
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You are welcome 🙏💜
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Is it your name? River Dixon? Sounds cool 😎
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Yeah, it’s my pen name.
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Good one 🙂
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Awesome one! Saved it for re-read 👌
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Thank you, I’m happy you like it!
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🕺🕺🕺👏
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I really love this; sharing a link on Go Dog Go Cafe where I am a barista.Your writing stirs my creative thoughts. Also, your pen name is great- it seems to suit you.
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Thank you. Your kind words mean a lot to me.
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You are most welcome. Your writing is so different from mine and it’s intriguing.
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I also enjoy your work.
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If so, I would venture to say for the same reason. Our styles are quite different. But, I noticed you and the family live in AZ- we have that in common. Lol.
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True, I enjoy all different styles. The variety of ways people express themselves is fascinating. I didn’t realize you are in Arizona, small world.
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Yes, down in Mesa. I’m guessing you are up north somewhere.
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Yeah. Not too far from you.
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We love . It’s charming. We rent a cabin up there from time to time.
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Yeah, it’s beautiful. I lived in Tucson for a couple years and it’s just too hot for me.
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When we moved to Az 21 years ago, we started in Cottonwood. We quickly realized most of the work was in Phoenix, so we moved down to the heat and 3 days later, had jobs. Lol- that was something.
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No doubt. People like us wanting out of the extreme heat. But we love our home here.
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Oh wait, now I remember, you are in the Arizona Emerging Writers!
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I am!! I am so stoked about that. To hold a book in my hand and see my name within it- wow.
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That is really cool, I’m happy for you.
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Thank you!
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Reblogged this on Go Dog Go Café and commented:
Barista Linda pick for Pay It Forward Thursday at the GDGC
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Thank you!
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your are welcome!
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A wondrous and insightful poem, I thoroughly enjoyed the read. I wrote a poem called “Hide and Seek”, I’ll link here >> https://ivors20.wordpress.com/2017/10/29/hide-and-seek/
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Thank you very much. I really, really enjoyed your poem, thanks for sharing it.
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Thank you 😊for reading, and I’m glad you liked my poem 😉
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You’re welcome.
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Everything you write is exceptionally beautiful but I always feel that there is something dark behind everything you write, maybe ’cause I can connect or something…
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Oh yeah, it’s always there. One of the things I try to do with my writing is to recognize the dark and look for some balance. Thank you for reading.
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Fabulous post
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Thank you.
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Please read my first post
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I so appreciate that no matter how many times I change my name, leave and return, you and your consistently-amazing writing are always here. Love seeing your face and “name” now and seemingly more in depth comment discussion, too. I think I’m fnally settling into myself after a lots-of-trials-and-lots-of-errors year in my debut as a writer. I’ve been a major fan of your writing all along the way. Thank you for using your gifts.
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This really resonates. Beautiful.
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Thank you.
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How much I miss
The fallen leaves
Midnight bike rides.
I felt that! It’s one the things I miss the most. Beautiful poem!
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Thank you very much.
I’m not sure if you are aware, but your avatar goes to a broken link. Your info shows as “fromanothersomewhere.wordpress.com.” I’d hate for people to miss out on your wonderful writing because they aren’t able to get to your site.
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I was unaware of that, but thank you for letting me know!
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You’re welcome.
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I am in awe.. That’s breathetaking!
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Thank you very much!
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This was beautifully written…well done!
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Thank you so much.
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❤
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warm-voiced, easy to love … what a light and elegant writer you are. – tsk
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Wow, thank you!
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Wow…
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Again a winner poem
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Thank you!
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River, this is a beautiful read.
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Thank you very much, I really appreciate that.
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I love this one. It hits the feels in the soft spot.
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Thank you very much, I really appreciate you reading.
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🙂 Of course!
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Brilliant! ❤
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Thanks, Penny.
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Amazing this is.
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Thank you.
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‘Hide And Seek’ pages 17 & 18 of my copy of ‘Left Waiting’ open on my desk, left of screen, reading in two places, it’s that online thing, distant, close – that paperback feeling, printed words, page turning, re-reading – either way this poem works.
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Thanks a lot, Eric.
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trains wait for the attention of thrown rocks
well done
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Thank you, Mark.
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Well written like always! 😊
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Thank you very much.
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“It’s only a matter of time
Till they come out, come out
From wherever they are”
I love that sequence!
Very cool poem with so much heart.
Thank you so much for sharing, River!
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And thank you so much for reading.
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“I’ll be safe in these spaces between” A good line; I feel this line many times. Enjoyed the poem.
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Thank you very much.
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The ending sent shivers down my spine.
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I appreciate you reading!
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So meaningful, I loved this one River!
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Thank you very much.
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Amazing writing.
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Thank you very much.
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another solid powerful gut punching poem, or a poem put out there from the gut, or perhaps both
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Thank you very much!
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