The glory of the passing Shared among the weak Claimed by the strong Hold it up with pride Bear witness to this Ignore as my mouth fills With the sickness For this is not For the easily offended If you can stomach this I applaud you Few can Fewer are willing To tear out The sacrificial insides Strewn about Hung like fine linen Draped over mouths Which were already silent To begin with You've got your darkness We all do But this is something new You've never heard Screams like these Never seen anything This empty You have to step in it To know it's there On the other Side of this Lies Your redemption Salvation Don't bother trying To understand I smell your fear Stoke your trepidation Strip you Of that blind faith You hold so dear You're ready for this And I promise you You'll never be The same
This sounds very dramatic, but I am used to think that at the end of every tunnel shines the light 😊
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I agree. The light is always there, we just don’t always see it.
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The danger in this is wonderful! The imagery and the rhythm are intoxicating. Great poem!
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Thank you Susan!
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love this …again 😂
👏👏👏
always some great lines:
Screams like these
Never seen anything
This empty
👍👍
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Thanks!
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Nice
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Thanks!
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Bravo! I just had to read this over and over again. Superbly crafted.
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Thank you, I really appreciate that!
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The accompanying photograph in the header made this poem doubly frightening…
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Thank you!
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Yes, about the photo 👆 I was going to say the same thing. You selected the perfect image to accompany this work. Very chilling indeed. Love it. 🖤
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Thank you very much!
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I would love to say more… But all I can think of is: this was awesome. Well done,I felt it within .
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Thank you very much, I really appreciate that!
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This is, of course, absolutely terribly incredible. I read it earlier, knew I had to come back to it. I wasn’t disappointed. I really like this. So good.
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Thank you!
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Superb
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Thank you!
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Stories, the chill factor is crushing! One last hurrah before redemption, although from the way it sounds it’s probably not that much fun. Great write! ~ Mia
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Certainly not my sort of fun but likely necessary. Thank you for reading Mia.
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Amazing! the ending is just!!!
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Thank you very much!
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I enjoyed this piece. It is introspective and interesting. As many have said, some powerful lines you’ve versed here. It isn’t as dark as it can go. This just shows that you don’t fully feel like this and you want to prove yourself wrong. And that is always a positive thing. 😀
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Thanks man. Yeah, there’s always some darkness. Acknowledge it, deal with it, try not to get stuck in it. There’s always something waiting for us on the other side of anything. Sometimes that can be scarier than just staying where we are at.
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True that. 😀
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I read this like 5 times trying to understand it and find a meaning. I feel something with this one.
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Hey, if you ever figure out what the hell it’s about, you let me know, OK?
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I did…A personal meaning for myself… I really like your writing
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Ah, thank you. I’m glad it found some meaning with you.
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Keep them coming 🙂
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and I feel a reblog coming..
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Thanks for the reblog, I really appreciate that.
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my pleasure.
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This is amazing! I just recently discovered your blog haha. But I look forward to more of your posts!
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I appreciate that, thank you for reading!
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This was just so, so beautiful :)<3
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Thank you!
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The rhythm and emotions in this poem! Simply great!❤️
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Thank you very much for the kind words.
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Captivating 👌
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Thank you very much!
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Welcome! 😊
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Hi
Thank you. I am happy to see your wonderful poem. It gives me a thoughtful thinking and am happy for that. That is always my intention to see a post that gives me happiness.
Am happy to share at least a part of that happiness and love here as am commenting now.
Well, If I wish to be happy is inevitable to keep the vibes flowing.
Cheers,
PATRICK
#PATRICKSTORIES
Peace ✌and Love ❤
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Thank you for reading.
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Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful response.
Such an awesome way of replying someone.
Thanks. Again.
You can also check on my blog for the recent post and say your own views and contribution on it.
I did a good post about : PUSHED
Love to see your contributions on it.
HAPPY SUNDAY
You are welcome dear friend
#PATRICKSTORIES
Peace ✌and Love ❤
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Thanks for liking my post (pushed)
I appreciate that very much.
It shows your concern for such post.
Again THANK YOU VERY MUCH
I still remain the simple blogger…..
#PATRICKSTORIES
Peace ✌and Love ❤
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You are welcome.
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Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful response.
Such an awesome way of replying someone.
Thanks. Again.
You can also check on my blog for the recent post and say your own views and contribution on it.
I did a good post about : PUSHED
Love to see your contributions on it.
HAPPY SUNDAY
You are welcome dear friend
#PATRICKSTORIES
Peace ✌and Love ❤
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Powerful, scary and inviting in a… dark way. Love it 🤗
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Thank you very much!
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Excellently crafted poem
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Thank you.
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Thank you for the reblog and support!
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That promise in the end… So full of strength and assurance…. Love it River!
Well done….
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Thank you, Monica.
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Ominous. But sadly true
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Change can be difficult.
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Wow. This is one that deserves several reads. Keep sharing your voice.
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Thank you!
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Wonderfully dark:-)
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Thank you.
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Wonderful piece…
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Thank you.
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Love this ♥️
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I appreciate that, thank you.
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Thank you so much for visiting my blog and liking my posts
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You’re welcome.
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