We speak of rebirth
As the morning breaks around us
Something had to die before the dawn
Could take its hold on the frigid
Unforgiving taste of yesterday
It’s hard sometimes, most of the time
But we’ve worked things out this far
As I watch you from across the room
I’m taken back to the first time
Your eyes found something
Worth holding onto, in me
And now the years have brought us
To where we are today, holding on
By a thread of hope
That once again we can remember
Who that person is that somehow
Became a stranger to our eyes
Such a nice flow in this one. It can almost be read in one breath.
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Thanks, Bojana. I was hoping this one flowed along smoothly.
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This is so beautiful! I can feel the “thread of hope” as I read and re-read. 😊
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Thank you so much!
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Take a bow, Poet!
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Thank you!
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Lovely!
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I appreciate that, thank you.
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Again, so true. And as Bojana said, great flow.
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Thanks, Basilike.
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Superbly beautiful ♥️
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Thank you.
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Beautiful ❤️
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Thanks, Rita.
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Heartbreaking.
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Thanks, Sam.
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👍👍👍
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Thank you, TJ.
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Hope…keeps pushing us in a direction as it plays and teases our thoughts…what a beautiful peace about the past and present tenses of our lives…holding on 💔.
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Thank you very much for reading!
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As so often, Bojana and Basilike say sooner and better what I’d say!
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Thanks, Eric.
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Captivating and moving words River.
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Thank you.
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Very welcome
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Amazing, River! You’ve captured the ebb and flow of relevant relationships well! 🙂
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Thank you so much!
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You’re welcome, River!
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💚
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I can fully adopt this to my personal circumstance. Thanks for creating this piece.
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You’re welcome. Thank you for reading it.
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I feel this piece strongly. Very good.
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Thank you, Tara.
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Perfect from start to finish. Almost looks as if you took the best parts of other poems…
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Thanks. Yeah, I know what you mean. A lot of my stuff ends up sounding the same. It’s hard to break from the themes that come naturally to me. I try. The delete button works overtime.
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Even the great Pablo Neruda harped on specific themes and he won a Nobel in literature…
I’ve been reading your book a little at a time. You can’t read a poetry book cover-to-cover. I enjoyed the one about the puppy on the sea shore a lot…
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Thanks, I appreciate that you not only purchased it, but are also reading it. As I mentioned in the forward of that book, people who are willing to give me their time is humbling and I’m thankful for it.
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This is a wonderful read. Thanks!
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You’re welcome. Thank you for reading.
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Infatuation is so mercurial. This really captures the moment those feelings change, River.
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Thank you for reading, Mitch.
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Oh my, my. This is just impeccable. The rhythm, the feelings, the portrayal, just flawless. Just loved it sir😍😍
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I appreciate that, thank you!
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My honour sir!
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I appreciate the tone in which it is written. Spot on.
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Thanks very much.
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This is a great piece, River. Nice work!
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Thank you!
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You’re welcome!
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Beautiful!
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Thank you.
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So Beautiful and touching . Love it !
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Thank you very much.
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change is inevitable isn’t it
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Sure is.
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A compelling and emotional read…..
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Thanks, Ivor.
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I find this sad… I’m reading again. That thread that this couple holds on to is true in so many relationships. Hope. Yes we all have hope. You are so gifted River. ~k.
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Thanks, Kim.
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The note of hope here balances the doomy atmosphere of “Closing Time.”
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Thanks, Audrey.
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Bravo 👏…lovely. Beautifully penned, such vivid imagery.
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Thank you, Yonnie.
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You are certainly welcome, River.
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Growing apart is a sad prospect. Nice look at how time can change us all.
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Thank you very much for reading!
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People change so much in the course of a relationship – life is difficult – beautifully described here River
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Thank you so much.
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This is so beautiful! Loved reading it. 🙂
P.S. If you are fond of writing stories, I have started a ‘story hop’ on my blog. Would you like to be a part of it?
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Thank you very much for reading. The story hop sounds interesting, I’ll check it out.
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Sure. Let me know whatever you decide. 😀
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Hi. Decided something yet?
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No, I have not. I’ve been quite busy.
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Reblogged this on I Write Her and commented:
River Dixon captured not only the nature of relationships in this piece but also, the evolution of change. Bravo!! This one HIT HOME for me.
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Very lovely! ❤
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Thank you, Deborah.
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An amazing poetic expression of a changing relationship.
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Thank you very much, Eugenia.
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Most welcome!
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I know the feeling of a person I knew becoming a stranger before my eyes.
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Were the two of you able to figure things out or did they remain a stranger?
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As metaphor, they remained a stranger. The relationship ended, which turned out to be a good thing.
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I see this is my mirror once in a while with myself River…..
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I can relate.
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The sadness in this is lilting, the hope of it living in the breath of the reading. It’s beautiful. Lines like this one “It’s hard sometimes, most of the time” are the kind of lines in poetry that are simple but give such pause, the kind of lines I love.
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Thank you for the kind words, Susan, it means a lot to me.
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That speaks volumes! Sometimes we get lost along the way, and lose sight of the person we fell in love with as life gets in the way for one reason or another. There is always hope and then sometimes we look a little closer and we see that the person we fell in love with is still there. Not sure if I am making any sense but I think relationships can go through many stages. A beautiful poem!
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You make total sense and your thinking is right in line with where I was coming from with this piece. Thank you!
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So beautiful
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Thank you!
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A beautiful comment on a waning flame. I read it twice and I’m still marinating. I really love your work, River. ♥
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Thank you very much for reading.
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You’re welcome. Take care.
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Sad but still has that thread of hope. The poem sounds good out loud, rather soft.
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Thank you, Priscilla.
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Being so near yet growing so distant. Yes, it happens and is painful. Well written! 🙂
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Thank you, Terveen.
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River, this is one for the ages. It touches the deep places of my heart. It is somewhere we all have been. It’s simply beautiful.
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Thank you very much, Phyllis.
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Reblogged this on Life On The Lake and commented:
This one is by my friend, River Dixon, I had to share it. We all have been there.
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This was so beautiful:-)
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Thank you.
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