i thought the screams would be more significant
echo, sustain, at the very least tremble, shake
the foundation, crack the plaster, split the glass
but the louder they came, the quicker it all disappeared
in wisps of blue smoke, across chapped lips, between
decayed teeth, dancing where a tongue once rooted
now torn from its throne, wags somewhere in the corner
of a room prepared for someone just like me, just like you
until, in the throes of our rebellion, we fail to notice
as another day unknowingly collapses all that has stood
for this long, and within the remnants we still scream
among the rubble and the stains of an old mattress
that no one wants or can figure out what to do with
Bleak and lovely. The tongue phrase in particular got to me.
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Thanks, Priscilla.
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Fantastic!
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Thank you, Dawn.
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Compelling read River – the last two lines closing perfectly. All the best. Eric.
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Thanks a lot, Eric.
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Top tier writing (as always) and I love the imagery!
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Thanks, Tara.
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Superbly crafted, as always, River. I love the tongue phrase too, and ‘as another day unknowingly collapses…’. Don’t know how you do it.
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Thanks, Alli.
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Wow, that imagery was incredible, especially at the end.
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Thanks, Suzanne.
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