I’ve finally
Come up
With an ending
But I
Don’t think
You’re going
To like it
It involves
The holding
Of one’s
Breath
A submersion
Into the
Inevitable failings
Of all
Who came
Before you
There’s nothing
To hold onto
Not anymore
Not if you
Want to
Understand
To float
And bob
Amongst
The waves
As the
Current flows
Farther
From what
It means
To live
Or should
I say
What you
Thought
It meant
To live
And if
At any
Moment
You no
Longer fear
Opening
Your mouth
Taking in
The acrid
Brine of
A new
Existence
Your eyes
Will burn
Temporarily
But soon
Enough
Will see
You are
No longer
Them
And they
Are no longer
You
I’m in. Let’s do it.
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Ok. But I’m driving.
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Deal
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Holy cow. Emotional.
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Thank you.
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It’s true and it’s perfect! Bravo!!! It’s also a good thing.
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Yes, it is. Thank you.
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You thought wrong – definitely going to like it 😍🤯
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I love being wrong.
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Wow, River, so good.
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Thanks. I hope you’re feeling better.
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It’s a long journey ahead.
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Hauntingly beautiful!
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Thanks, Holly.
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A pleasure!
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Fabulous, River. I love ‘the acrid brine of a new existence’. Perfectly put.
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Thank you very much, Alli.
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Incredibly emotional and excellent writing, as always 💕 seriously touched by this piece, River. (And perfect title as well.)
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Thanks, Tara.
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It’s dark, yet somehow..soothing and gentle.
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Thanks, Kat.
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Love it mate.
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Thank you!
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Fabulous read.
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Thank you very much.
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Pleasure 🙂
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You’re getting quite good at this poetry lark 😉
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Thank you!
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I read this as a creepy inversion of baptism.
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That’s a good way to look at it, thanks.
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Great words friend!
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Thank you.
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This is a masterpiece! I appreciate the way this poem leads to a new way of existing, that’s simply existing without clinging into anything that we’re so familiar with. It’s not pleasant at first to confront the unfamiliar dimension but simply “floating” at the surface of our consciousness is the new beginning…
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Thank you. You always seem to grasp where I’m coming from with my writing. I don’t mind the different ways people interpret my work, but it’s nice to be understood.
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Sometimes, your poetry is the exact reflection of my inner realm. Therefore, it’s a joy to see someone had written truthfully about my own experiences.
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beautifully deep.
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Thank you.
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Outstanding poem! Thanks for sharing.
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Thank you for reading, Dawn.
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Drowning is a scary thought. Parting with someone you once loved is a scary thought. Passing to a new existence, whether through death or through a relationship breakup, doesn’t sound so bad.
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Thanks for reading, Priscilla.
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Excellent! 👏🏻
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Thank you, Michele.
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Sad but we all have to face death in order to float
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Thanks for reading, Jodine.
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Have you tried this yet, in dreams? Beautiful poem, River. ♥.
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Not “tried.” Sorry. Have you ever *experienced this yet in dreams? Please feel free to edit that. This is a place I visit all the time in dreams and the floating can be incredible. ♥.
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I can’t say that I’ve ever been there in a dream. I’ve thought about it a lot, though.
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This is most beautiful. I understand I believe some of what you are saying here. As a child I found refuge in a pond where I would float and go underwater with eyes wide open and feel such peace. Life outside was not pretty for me then and it was so calming. I could find peace in the silence, the calm before my next storm. I often prayed I could live in the water if God wouldn’t just put down his Holly Hand and carry me Home. Now even the water is a dangerous place, so very sad. Sending hugs and appreciation, Joni
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Thanks for sharing that, Joni.
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