I dared to lick the stars from your face
That September evening, caught in the throes
Of a downward spiral, coming from a place
I once thought could go no deeper
Or last any longer, but the bottom
Fell out from under me, and I dug
My fingers into nothing, for there was
Nothing left to break my fall, except
The briefest taste of stars, your stars
That once gone, left only a blackened face
To watch my decent, as your illumination
Suffered a cold death inside my failing mouth
Oh my how I love this
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Thank you, EC.
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Brilliant.
Love that first line! 👍🖤
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Thank you very much!
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You’re most welcome.
A great read this one! 👍🖤
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Ice cold space taste.
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Thanks for reading!
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You had me at ‘I dared to lick the stars from your face’, River. Wonderfully evocative.
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Thank you, as always, Alli.
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No weaknesses in that poem, whatsoever. Wonderful!
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Thanks, Charlie.
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I felt this one deep in my bones. Brilliant.
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Thank you very much.
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Beautiful!
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Thank you, Angela.
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My pleasure.
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Superb
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Thank you.
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Stunning poem River. Great last line.
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I appreciate that, thank you very much.
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To feel this is always worth the fall I feel.
Moving words.
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For sure.
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Wow, I love this piece. The way you wove stars together with the blackness of falling and the void of space is enchanting.
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Thank you very much!
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Very nice, very dark! Especially when the stars are gone.
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Thank you very much!
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I love this imagery. 💙
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Thank you very much.
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Touching.
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Thank you!
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Welcome 🙂
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Fabulous.
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Thank you.
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Multi-leveled genius poem, impressive depth of imagery and the sinking feeling of abysmal love.
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Thank you very much for reading, Judy.
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It’s my pleasure to read your work, River.
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Wow….just wow..
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Thanks!
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“Licked the stars from your face… a blackened face.” Oh, that’s awesome.
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Thanks for reading, Priscilla.
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Wow!
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Thanks, Sharon.
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This is beautiful River 👏
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Thank you.
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That sense of keep falling down, deeper, deeper, not knowing if there’s a bottom to what you’re falling into, it quite, scary that’s for sure.
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Thank you for reading!
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This poem is one of the best that I have read, River! Beautiful descriptions!
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I appreciate that, thank you.
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So beautiful!
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Thanks, Suzanne.
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You painted such a vivid picture… a magnificent poem River!
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Thank you!
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“…as your illumination suffered a cold death inside my failing mouth,” : when someone departs from the world, the light of his/her soul will be gone and we tumble down into the dark nothingness. And it’s a bottomless pit.
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Thank you, Neelam.
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this one is lovely
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Thank you, Kat!
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